Comments on: You Can’t Keep Up http://themoonlitroad.com/you-cant-keep-up/ Southern ghost stories, folktales, myths and legends Tue, 07 Feb 2012 18:14:16 +0000 hourly 1 http://wordpress.org/?v=3.3.1 By: I'll rate you xoxo http://themoonlitroad.com/you-cant-keep-up/#comment-5895 I'll rate you xoxo Thu, 29 Dec 2011 16:42:51 +0000 http://themoonlitroad.com/?p=2418#comment-5895 Story: 6.5 I wished the author decribed Carol a bit more! I wanted to know why she did this to the men she meets, why did she have a thirst for murder? Maybe a bit of backgroud information about her past with men would have fitted in somewhere in the story. I liked the steadiness and pace of the story though, and some of the imagery techniques used. Characters: 7 I liked Frank you could feel much compassion for him and a feeling of 'why why him?' he was a likable character and was only ever nice to Carol which is why I would punch her in the face if I ever saw her or could catch her! Carol is mysterious, wonderous, deranged and evil. I never guessed at the start she would be so... malicious! Prose and Punctuation: 5 Pretty average use of punctuation and words used. Could have been a bit more thought-out and revised. Ending: 5.5 It kind me left me hanging, or though I found the last paragraph to be poetic and gentle. I would of liked it better if it was just a little bit more scarier and maybe involving the bones of the victims coming to claim Frank or something like that! Additives: 10 Loved the photos gave the story another element and an idea of where it is 'shot'. Beautiful photos! Story: 6.5
I wished the author decribed Carol a bit more! I wanted to know why she did this to the men she meets, why did she have a thirst for murder? Maybe a bit of backgroud information about her past with men would have fitted in somewhere in the story. I liked the steadiness and pace of the story though, and some of the imagery techniques used.

Characters: 7
I liked Frank you could feel much compassion for him and a feeling of ‘why why him?’ he was a likable character and was only ever nice to Carol which is why I would punch her in the face if I ever saw her or could catch her! Carol is mysterious, wonderous, deranged and evil. I never guessed at the start she would be so… malicious!

Prose and Punctuation: 5
Pretty average use of punctuation and words used. Could have been a bit more thought-out and revised.

Ending: 5.5
It kind me left me hanging, or though I found the last paragraph to be poetic and gentle. I would of liked it better if it was just a little bit more scarier and maybe involving the bones of the victims coming to claim Frank or something like that!

Additives: 10
Loved the photos gave the story another element and an idea of where it is ‘shot’. Beautiful photos!

]]> By: bubble123 http://themoonlitroad.com/you-cant-keep-up/#comment-5338 bubble123 Tue, 01 Nov 2011 19:49:56 +0000 http://themoonlitroad.com/?p=2418#comment-5338 just wanted to say i dont really like this story kinda long dosent get to the point and not scary at all! please make more scary stories! just wanted to say i dont really like this story kinda long dosent get to the point and not scary at all! please make more scary stories!

]]> By: olivia http://themoonlitroad.com/you-cant-keep-up/#comment-5271 olivia Wed, 26 Oct 2011 14:52:08 +0000 http://themoonlitroad.com/?p=2418#comment-5271 I love this story! I love this story!

]]> By: ChicaChilena http://themoonlitroad.com/you-cant-keep-up/#comment-4177 ChicaChilena Sat, 20 Aug 2011 20:18:13 +0000 http://themoonlitroad.com/?p=2418#comment-4177 It's a really good story, but i think they should say a little more about that girl... It’s a really good story, but i think they should say a little more about that girl…

]]> By: Maranda de Santos http://themoonlitroad.com/you-cant-keep-up/#comment-4083 Maranda de Santos Mon, 08 Aug 2011 04:03:31 +0000 http://themoonlitroad.com/?p=2418#comment-4083 Absolutely loved it. The girl is perhaps a little cold hearted, to say the least. Absolutely loved it. The girl is perhaps a little cold hearted, to say the least.

]]> By: Michele Carmack http://themoonlitroad.com/you-cant-keep-up/#comment-3486 Michele Carmack Sun, 10 Apr 2011 18:33:20 +0000 http://themoonlitroad.com/?p=2418#comment-3486 I loved the story!!! Had all the anticipation I expected. Would love to see more from this Writer!!Where can I find more of his stories?? Looking forward to knowing more about the author and where he gets his Inspiration. Sincerely, Michele Carmack. I loved the story!!! Had all the anticipation I expected. Would love to see more from this Writer!!Where can I find more of his stories?? Looking forward to knowing more about the author and where he gets his Inspiration. Sincerely, Michele Carmack.

]]> By: Kevin Moebius http://themoonlitroad.com/you-cant-keep-up/#comment-3282 Kevin Moebius Wed, 16 Feb 2011 05:50:00 +0000 http://themoonlitroad.com/?p=2418#comment-3282 I thought it was intresting about some girle comes out of no where and desides to walk to the forst and hills but i think it more work to don"t know what happen at the end but again may be its a mistery type of storey I thought it was intresting about some girle comes out of no where and desides to walk to the forst and hills but i think it more work to don”t know what happen at the end but again may be its a mistery type of storey

]]> By: Tobi Marie http://themoonlitroad.com/you-cant-keep-up/#comment-3055 Tobi Marie Wed, 02 Feb 2011 21:20:08 +0000 http://themoonlitroad.com/?p=2418#comment-3055 I loved this story. I really wanted to know more and have more to read! I loved this story. I really wanted to know more and have more to read!

]]> By: Rachel http://themoonlitroad.com/you-cant-keep-up/#comment-2704 Rachel Wed, 12 Jan 2011 09:06:32 +0000 http://themoonlitroad.com/?p=2418#comment-2704 Wonderful story! Please keep writing! Wonderful story! Please keep writing!

]]> By: Pansy Morrison http://themoonlitroad.com/you-cant-keep-up/#comment-2577 Pansy Morrison Thu, 23 Dec 2010 23:07:57 +0000 http://themoonlitroad.com/?p=2418#comment-2577 I thought the story was interesting, and with a little work, could easily be an episode on a "Twilight Zone" type show. Not bad. :) I thought the story was interesting, and with a little work, could easily be an episode on a “Twilight Zone” type show. Not bad. :)

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