Comments on: You Can’t Keep Up http://themoonlitroad.com/you-cant-keep-up/ Southern ghost stories, folktales, myths and legends Mon, 21 May 2012 13:02:56 +0000 hourly 1 http://wordpress.org/?v=3.3.1 By: Athought http://themoonlitroad.com/you-cant-keep-up/#comment-7764 Athought Fri, 04 May 2012 16:10:31 +0000 http://themoonlitroad.com/?p=2418#comment-7764 Just a thought... Maybe the girl is not evil or bad just really childlike and innocent. The story says at the beginging the girl was childish like an 8 year old so perhaps she just likes racing and convinces people to go up in to the woods to race her. People don't tend to die of exhaustion from one day running, so what is killing them? probably not the girl...she ran off at the end. Yes she must be aware that it ends up getting them killed but in her innocence doesn't see that as wrong? This way the story would have a great moral as well, Something about never letting innocence lead you astray. Just a thought… Maybe the girl is not evil or bad just really childlike and innocent. The story says at the beginging the girl was childish like an 8 year old so perhaps she just likes racing and convinces people to go up in to the woods to race her.
People don’t tend to die of exhaustion from one day running, so what is killing them? probably not the girl…she ran off at the end. Yes she must be aware that it ends up getting them killed but in her innocence doesn’t see that as wrong?
This way the story would have a great moral as well, Something about never letting innocence lead you astray.

]]> By: ashaye http://themoonlitroad.com/you-cant-keep-up/#comment-7521 ashaye Wed, 28 Mar 2012 17:36:00 +0000 http://themoonlitroad.com/?p=2418#comment-7521 this story is so allsome and so good i hope you make another book like this this story is so allsome and so good i hope you make another book like this

]]> By: I'll rate you xoxo http://themoonlitroad.com/you-cant-keep-up/#comment-5895 I'll rate you xoxo Thu, 29 Dec 2011 16:42:51 +0000 http://themoonlitroad.com/?p=2418#comment-5895 Story: 6.5 I wished the author decribed Carol a bit more! I wanted to know why she did this to the men she meets, why did she have a thirst for murder? Maybe a bit of backgroud information about her past with men would have fitted in somewhere in the story. I liked the steadiness and pace of the story though, and some of the imagery techniques used. Characters: 7 I liked Frank you could feel much compassion for him and a feeling of 'why why him?' he was a likable character and was only ever nice to Carol which is why I would punch her in the face if I ever saw her or could catch her! Carol is mysterious, wonderous, deranged and evil. I never guessed at the start she would be so... malicious! Prose and Punctuation: 5 Pretty average use of punctuation and words used. Could have been a bit more thought-out and revised. Ending: 5.5 It kind me left me hanging, or though I found the last paragraph to be poetic and gentle. I would of liked it better if it was just a little bit more scarier and maybe involving the bones of the victims coming to claim Frank or something like that! Additives: 10 Loved the photos gave the story another element and an idea of where it is 'shot'. Beautiful photos! Story: 6.5
I wished the author decribed Carol a bit more! I wanted to know why she did this to the men she meets, why did she have a thirst for murder? Maybe a bit of backgroud information about her past with men would have fitted in somewhere in the story. I liked the steadiness and pace of the story though, and some of the imagery techniques used.

Characters: 7
I liked Frank you could feel much compassion for him and a feeling of ‘why why him?’ he was a likable character and was only ever nice to Carol which is why I would punch her in the face if I ever saw her or could catch her! Carol is mysterious, wonderous, deranged and evil. I never guessed at the start she would be so… malicious!

Prose and Punctuation: 5
Pretty average use of punctuation and words used. Could have been a bit more thought-out and revised.

Ending: 5.5
It kind me left me hanging, or though I found the last paragraph to be poetic and gentle. I would of liked it better if it was just a little bit more scarier and maybe involving the bones of the victims coming to claim Frank or something like that!

Additives: 10
Loved the photos gave the story another element and an idea of where it is ‘shot’. Beautiful photos!

]]> By: bubble123 http://themoonlitroad.com/you-cant-keep-up/#comment-5338 bubble123 Tue, 01 Nov 2011 19:49:56 +0000 http://themoonlitroad.com/?p=2418#comment-5338 just wanted to say i dont really like this story kinda long dosent get to the point and not scary at all! please make more scary stories! just wanted to say i dont really like this story kinda long dosent get to the point and not scary at all! please make more scary stories!

]]> By: olivia http://themoonlitroad.com/you-cant-keep-up/#comment-5271 olivia Wed, 26 Oct 2011 14:52:08 +0000 http://themoonlitroad.com/?p=2418#comment-5271 I love this story! I love this story!

]]> By: ChicaChilena http://themoonlitroad.com/you-cant-keep-up/#comment-4177 ChicaChilena Sat, 20 Aug 2011 20:18:13 +0000 http://themoonlitroad.com/?p=2418#comment-4177 It's a really good story, but i think they should say a little more about that girl... It’s a really good story, but i think they should say a little more about that girl…

]]> By: Maranda de Santos http://themoonlitroad.com/you-cant-keep-up/#comment-4083 Maranda de Santos Mon, 08 Aug 2011 04:03:31 +0000 http://themoonlitroad.com/?p=2418#comment-4083 Absolutely loved it. The girl is perhaps a little cold hearted, to say the least. Absolutely loved it. The girl is perhaps a little cold hearted, to say the least.

]]> By: Michele Carmack http://themoonlitroad.com/you-cant-keep-up/#comment-3486 Michele Carmack Sun, 10 Apr 2011 18:33:20 +0000 http://themoonlitroad.com/?p=2418#comment-3486 I loved the story!!! Had all the anticipation I expected. Would love to see more from this Writer!!Where can I find more of his stories?? Looking forward to knowing more about the author and where he gets his Inspiration. Sincerely, Michele Carmack. I loved the story!!! Had all the anticipation I expected. Would love to see more from this Writer!!Where can I find more of his stories?? Looking forward to knowing more about the author and where he gets his Inspiration. Sincerely, Michele Carmack.

]]> By: Kevin Moebius http://themoonlitroad.com/you-cant-keep-up/#comment-3282 Kevin Moebius Wed, 16 Feb 2011 05:50:00 +0000 http://themoonlitroad.com/?p=2418#comment-3282 I thought it was intresting about some girle comes out of no where and desides to walk to the forst and hills but i think it more work to don"t know what happen at the end but again may be its a mistery type of storey I thought it was intresting about some girle comes out of no where and desides to walk to the forst and hills but i think it more work to don”t know what happen at the end but again may be its a mistery type of storey

]]> By: Tobi Marie http://themoonlitroad.com/you-cant-keep-up/#comment-3055 Tobi Marie Wed, 02 Feb 2011 21:20:08 +0000 http://themoonlitroad.com/?p=2418#comment-3055 I loved this story. I really wanted to know more and have more to read! I loved this story. I really wanted to know more and have more to read!

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